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In some nations ,they have the option to import food fr all around the glob. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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Many
countries
 bring
food
 from other
countries
 .Some people see that importing goods has many advantages for the nation and others see the opposite.At the
rist
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first
 of the
paragraphs
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 I am going to mention the positive and
negitive
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negative
 aspects of that topic.
Firstly
, I
am mostly agree
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mostly agree
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 that the benefits are more
that
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than
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 the disadvantage because importing
food
 from
other
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others
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 can
led
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lead
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 to
variety
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a variety
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 of
food
 in the
country
.
Whereas
 if they do not get
food
 from other
countries
 that can result in
lack
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a lack
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 of
food
 and few kinds of vegetables and fruits in the
country
.
Furthermore
 importing
food
 from different
countries
 can
also
rise
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raise
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 the
tourists
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number of tourists
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 in your
country
.
For example
,some people when they travel abroad for a long period
they
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apply
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absolutely want to eat the main meal in their
country
.
Therefore
 if you import
food
 you can get
wide
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a wide
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 range of
food
 types and that can
rise
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raise
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 the tourism level in the
country
.
On the other hand
,bringing
food
 from other
country
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countries
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 has many disadvantages.
For example
,if you import
food
 from
different
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a different
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country
 and do not rely on the
food
 from the
country
 you could spend
much
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apply
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money on that.
Also
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 that can effect negatively on the financial ministry by pulling the money of the
country
 down. In conclusion,many
countries
 import
food
 from other nations and other
countries
 rely on their own
food
 and both sides
has
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 negative and positive impacts but in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 the benefits from importing goods are
more
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greater
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.
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task achievement
Ensure that your examples directly support the point you are making. For instance, the example about tourism could be more directly tied to the availability of imported food.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining your sentence structure and grammatical accuracy to improve the clarity of your ideas.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of importing food, showing a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a consistent structure.

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