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Band 2.5

There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

#noise #places #cities
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public sites have massive
noise
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This
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, it must be addressed by definite actions. To pinpoint the paramount issue behind
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 unfavourable sound is
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 of vehicles passing the roads. As
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 these vehicles not only make
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 in cities but
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 accelerate the negative impact on
environment
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 accurate root cause is construction infrastructure. Because,
maintainence
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maintenance
 of roads being upsurged the
noise
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 pollution in our surroundings owing to which, accidents would
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 in the urban areas.
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, there are colossal ways to combat the menacing impact of
noise
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 in towns. The
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 concrete solution is
car pooling
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carpooling
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. Authorities should
aware
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 public regarding
car pooling
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carpooling
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 so that they can control a huge number of vehicles. Moving
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government
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 should provide more opportunities to construction companies so that they are being motivated towards their work in accordance with efficiency. To
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 problem requires attention and
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 actions like
car pooling
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carpooling
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 and development of construction tools in order to complete the work more adequately and to escape the nasty effect of
noise
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 over the towns.
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coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, ensure each paragraph has one main idea and is clearly linked to the overall argument. Consider using transitional phrases more effectively to enhance flow.
task achievement
Elaborate on the points made with more specific examples and clear explanations. Provide more details on how car pooling can specifically reduce noise pollution and how construction companies can be motivated to reduce noise.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the problem and solutions well.
task achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the question by identifying causes and proposing solutions.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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