The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart depicts changes in the proportion of native Australians and those born abroad, who live in cities, towns and rural
areas
between 1995 and 2010. As reflected by the y-axis the population is measured from zero to 60% in 1995 and to 80% in 2010.
Overall
, the number of people living in intraurban
areas
was always the highest and increased during the years. In 1995 around half of the population lived in the cities,
although
the proportion of foreigners was higher by around 10%. In 2010 the percentage of native Australians, who were living in cities, increased by approximately 13% and of those born abroad by
one fifth
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.
In contrast
, the tendency of individuals
preferring
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to live in
the
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rural
areas
rather than towns flipped. Even though, both percentages have dropped. The biggest drop was between individuals, who originated from
the
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outside of Australia and lived in rural
areas
, in 1995 and 2010. The proportion has decreased by
one third
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one-third
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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