Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people are of the opinion that there is an obligation for
classes
relating to art
, namely drawing and painting to be added to high schools
' schedule
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as
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because of
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of a child personally, I partly agree Add an article
the evaluation
art
classes
are obligated to be taught in high schools
and will discuss why in this
essay.
On the one hand, it is compulsory for teachers to conduct classes
relating to art
due to
a significant reason of enhancing students' carefulness. Once young people are painting a work of art
, each part of the work require
different colours, so they may be extremely careful not Correct subject-verb agreement
requires
evasing
to other regions of that painting, if not, it can lead to the reduction of the artistry of the drawing. Verb problem
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For instance
, more than half of children are considered to be more careful than their peers as they take part in the classes
of art
. As a result
, the officials should put art
classes
into the high schools
students because of their care improvement.
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school
On the other hand
, there are some oppositions to teaching the
teenagers how to draw and paint in high Correct article usage
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school
because it can waste their precious time
. It is acknowledged that three years of high school
are the
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a
time
for children to prepare for their university enrollment by taking an exorbitantly crucial exam, which deters them can get
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getting
schools
. Due to
the fact that the test concentrates on three main subjects such
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Math, literature and English , so if they only spend their Change preposition
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time
joining art
classes
it is possible for them to miss the golden time
for studying those primary subjects. Take Vietnam as an example, some schools
make a decision to eliminate all the non-essential, including art
for the existence of a greater number of Math, English and Literature classes
. For that reason, in order to get in
the students' favourite educational institutions. adding Change preposition
into
art
classes
to the timetable of high school
pupils is restricted.
In conclusion, although
the advantage of allowing the teaching of drawing and painting in high
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school
setting need
considering as it can help teenage people to behave carefully, there are some drawbacks of being Correct subject-verb agreement
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the
waste of Correct article usage
a
time
which can be utilised for other vital subjects to make sure of the absolut
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