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Top honeymoon dsetinations for newlywed British couples in 2010

#honeymoon #dsetinations #british #couples
The graph illustrates
the
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information about the top
honeymoon
 destinations for newlywed British
couples
 in 2010. The
survey
 was taken between 5,000
couples
.
Overall
, the well-known places which had been highlighted in the chart,
such
 as Spain, Paris, Thailand, The Lake District, The Maldives, The Greek Islands, Bali and Costa Rica were selected by the British
couples
 who really were eager to enjoy
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their
honeymoon
. In the first
list
 came Thailand, with 1.410
couples
,
whereas
 Spain was the
last
 just 140
couples
 opted for the
honeymoon
. Bali was second on the
list
, with 1.335
couples
, preferring to spend their
honeymoon
in
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hot
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 and sandy beach.
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Costa Rica was ranked third with 750
couples
, who were keen on drinking
smoothie
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in
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golden coast
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Golden Coast
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. The Maldives ranked
in
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fourth
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 the
survey
, with 600
couples
.
Although
 the historical
backgrounds
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, The Greek Islands came next in the graph with 432
couples
. It
placed
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 in the fifth line in the
survey
. The city which is known as “The Romantic City” – Paris was one of the bottom destinations of the
list
 with 209
couples
. Opposed to Thailand, The Lake District headed on the dip of the
list
 with 124
couples
due to
survey
. Two cities
such
 as Spain and the Lake District can be recognized as the bottom
honeymoon
 for
couples
.
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grammatical accuracy
Ensure consistency in verb tenses and improve accuracy with subject-verb agreement. For example, 'Spain was the last just 140 couples opted' should be 'Spain was the last with just 140 couples opting'.
task achievement
Develop an effective conclusion summarizing the main points and maybe suggesting an overall trend or insight.
clarity
Clarify specific points for better comprehension. For example, 'keen on drinking smoothie in golden coast' could be rephrased as 'keen on enjoying smoothies on the golden coast'.
vocabulary
Good use of varied vocabulary and descriptive language, which adds interest to the writing.
task achievement
Includes specific data from the graph, which shows an understanding of the task requirements.
coherence
The essay has a logical flow, with clear paragraphs discussing different destinations.

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