Some people believe that professional athletes serve as positive role models for young people, while others argue that their behavior both on and off the field can have a negative influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
In
this
competitive era, where people
improve themselves to be on top of their field
. One of them are
professional Change the verb form
is
athletes
. They inspire young
generation to become better in their Add an article
the young
a young
field
. While
some people
thinks
Change the verb form
think
thier
behaviour might have Correct your spelling
their
negative
influence on Add an article
a negative
adolescent
. As Fix the agreement mistake
adolescents
further
we go, i
will give Change the capitalization
I
opinion
on both sides.
As we know, Correct pronoun usage
my opinion
coin
has two Correct article usage
a coin
side
, Change to a plural noun
sides
same
goes Correct article usage
the same
to
other things Change preposition
for
poisitive
or negative. Correct your spelling
positive
Athletes
shows
young Change the verb form
show
people
that they can achive
their Correct your spelling
achieve
goal
Fix the agreement mistake
goals
,
if they work hard or Remove the comma
apply
be
consistent. They let their actions talk that if someone Wrong verb form
are
have
a dream and desire to Change the verb form
has
achive
that goal, nothing can stop them. Correct your spelling
achieve
For example
, many atheltes
Correct your spelling
athletes
gives
Change the verb form
give
same
advice to others that if they control their mind and be Add an article
the same
stuborn
Correct your spelling
stubborn
to
their goal nothing is impossible. Change preposition
in
Although
, it's not easy but
if it is easy Remove the conjunction
apply
than
anyone can do it.
Replace the word
then
On the other hand
, players
Change noun form
players'
player's
behavior
can Change the spelling
behaviour
give
Verb problem
have
negative
influence on and off the Correct article usage
a negative
field
. Just like other humans, athletes
are also
human. They also
behave different
on and off Change the adjective
differently
field
. Some might show aggression on Add an article
the field
field
and calmness off Correct article usage
the field
filed
or vice-versa. Correct your spelling
field
For example
, when game
is in Add an article
the game
a game
Correct article usage
the cruical
cruical
stage many Correct your spelling
critical
crucial
athletes
lose their temperament and do things which might make them lose game
or get Add an article
a game
the game
criticize
from Replace the word
criticism
fan
.
Fix the agreement mistake
fans
Conclusion
from the above discussion, we can say that young Change preposition
In conclusion
people
should take positive things from athletes
. No one in this
world is correct or right but it depend
on us what image or habit we want to learn from others.Change the verb form
depends
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Introduction
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