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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in an European country bbetween 1979 and 2004
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The graph illustrates the
consumption
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 patterns of fish and various types of meat (
chicken
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,
beef
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, and
lamb
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) in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
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, there were significant changes in the
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 of these protein sources over the 25-year period.
Chicken
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consumption
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 increased steadily,
while
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beef
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 and
lamb
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consumption
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 declined. Fish
consumption
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,
however
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, remained relatively stable throughout the period. In more detail,
chicken
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consumption
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 started below 150
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 in 1979. It surpassed
lamb
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 in 1980 and
beef
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 in 1989, reaching its peak at 250
grams
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 by 2004.
This
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 indicates a growing preference for
chicken
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 over the years. Fish
consumption
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 was the lowest among the four protein sources, starting at 60
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 in 1979. It remained fairly stable, hovering around 50
grams
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 per
week
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 from 1984 to 1999, and
then
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 slightly declined to 40
grams
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 in 2004.
Beef
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consumption
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 was
initially
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 the highest, at 220
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 in 1979. It fluctuated between 175 and nearly 250
grams
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 from 1979 to 1984. After stabilizing at around 240
grams
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 for five years, it experienced a sharp decline, dropping to 100
grams
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 by 2004.
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,
lamb
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consumption
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 began at 150
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 in 1979. It showed a downward trend, with minor increases in 1987 and 1997 at 125 and 100
grams
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, respectively, but ultimately fell to nearly 50
grams
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 by 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, chicken, beef, lamb, grams, person, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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