You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

In
this
era, people don't need
newspaper
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newspapers
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to find
the
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information. They can get all they want to know through social media. The use of
that
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such
media is no longer considered practical. Nowadays, people are served updated news free and quickly. Actually, the problem is not the content in the newspaper but the speed and ease of information which is important today.
This
means that there is a shift in people's need for the form of presenting news. Apart from that, using paper
are be
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judged environmentally unfriendly
becuase
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because
they use it
for
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only once.
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task achievement
To strengthen your task achievement, provide more relevant examples to support your arguments, such as specific instances of news being quickly accessible via social media.
coherence cohesion
Add a conclusion to summarize your main points and restate your position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly introduces and expands on a single idea. For instance, separate the discussion of environmental concerns into its own paragraph for better clarity.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear viewpoint on how the internet is overtaking newspapers in delivering news quickly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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