a colleague at work is organizing a goodbye party which you are not able to attend . write a letter to him / her . * explain reason why you cannot attend * good memories you have spent * how you will stay in touch

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Dear Bayu, Hope

this

letter finds you in great health and mental peace, and everything is okay on your end. I was really happy to see the letter with the invitation to your farewell

party

. I'm glad that you have

find

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better

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a better

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company for your future. Unfortunately, I can'

attend your

party

due to

unavoidable

reason

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reasons

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. I have many projects in

USA

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the USA

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and Canada

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and

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our manager

encourage

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encouraged

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me to promote the new product. Please forgive me, as I really understand how

this

party

is essential for you. We have

many

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had many

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unforgetable

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unforgettable

moments since 10 years ago,

you

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but you

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always

assist

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me when I

can'

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couldn't

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handle our project as

good

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as possible.

Also

, you are the first person who always visit my house if I

held

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hold

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barbeque

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a barbeque

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party

or if I

got

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get

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sick and can'

go to work. You always share your knowledge

for

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with

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me, if I don'

know about anything. Absolutely, you are my best partner. Hopefully, we can continue our friendship,

although

you work in

other

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company. I would love it if you still visit my house or we can

held

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hold

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many

party

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parties

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together.

Besides

, we can share our own

thought

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about anything. Thank you for everything, and good luck in your new company. I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards Yohanes

Submitted by patricius.yohanes on Tue May 21 2024

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coherence and cohesion

Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'unforgetable' instead of 'unforgettable,' and 'held' instead of 'hold.' These can detract from the overall clarity.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph presents a single cohesive idea. While your paragraphs mostly achieve this, sometimes they touch on multiple points that could be more clearly separated.

task response

The letter clearly answers the main points of the task: explaining why you cannot attend, sharing good memories, and mentioning how you will keep in touch.

task response

Your writing tone is very appropriate for a farewell letter to a colleague; it sounds friendly and sincere.

coherence and cohesion

Your letter is well-organized. Starting with the greeting, you logically progress through explaining your inability to attend, sharing memories, and concluding with staying in touch and offering well-wishes.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

7.5

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

216 words

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