The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.
The given bar charts present the performance of a
bus
company from 1999 to 2003 where one compares the punctuality of its service between actual and targeted indicated in percentages, and another compares the number of
complaints
per thousand
passengers's
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journey.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that
the
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during the first four comparing years never accomplished its aims,
whereas
that
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of in
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2003 was the only year that its figure
of
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for
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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arriving on
time
had
surpassing
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its targeted goal.
However
, it is interesting to note that
unlike
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its punctuality success, its
complaints
was
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were
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by far the most among other the given
time
frame.
To begin
with, in terms of arrival
time
, in 1999 and 2000
company
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the company
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were aiming
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to pursue
punctual
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arrival
time
at
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86%,
hence
, the actual number
were
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far behind
of
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its goal at 1% and 4%, respectively.
Moreover
, they dropped
down
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their milestone
1
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by 1
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% more as a hope of accomplishment and yet they still have not made it in the end. Surprisingly, with
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slighly
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slight
fall of its target, the
bus
finally
outwin
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its
dreamed
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figure in 2003. In regards
with
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,
disatisfaction
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dissatisfaction
satisfaction
reports of the
bus
service, in 1999 at about 70
complaints
received was the lowest
figures
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among the other years.
Though
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, there were fluctuation trends
of
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the aforementioned reports between
in
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2000 and 2002 ranging from more than 80 to 110
complaints
. In 2003, the satisfaction of the commuters
were
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not matched and
number
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a number
the number
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of
complaints
skyrocketed
up
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to 120
complains
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, complaints, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punctuality
  • target versus actual performance
  • correlation
  • consistency
  • trends
  • passenger numbers
  • complaints
  • assessment
  • measures taken
  • impact
  • effectiveness
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