In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read ebooks rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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. They're growing up between teenagers and school pupils. In their opinion, it is more suitable than
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are better for me. Because that's enjoyable.
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can be harmful to the eyes. There are many disadvantages
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means that they shouldn't read
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when you
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at home.
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, there are advantages too.
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are more expensive than
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to read
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are more interesting to read. You can everywhere when you want. I have a friend who
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from shops and
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, not
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, in the book shops or in a library you can get advice about
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because they
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not have smartphones when they were young. I strongly believe that there will always be interest
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task response
The essay should have a clear, specific thesis in the introduction to guide the reader, such as 'The advantages of paper books far outweigh the advantages of e-books, especially regarding enjoyment and eye health.'
task response
Include more specific examples and evidence to support your points. For instance, mention studies or personal anecdotes that illustrate the harmful effects of e-books on vision.
coherence
Work on improving the logical flow of your paragraphs. Make sure each paragraph discusses one main idea and directly supports your thesis.
cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Use linking words and phrases such as 'However,' 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' and 'For example.'
task response
The essay presents a clear stance that paper books are preferable due to their enjoyment and health benefits.
task response
The essay includes both advantages and disadvantages of e-books which shows an attempt to present a balanced argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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