The chart shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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of
residents
buying
coffee
and
tea
in
last
Correct article usage
the last
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4
weeks
in
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
and
Hobart
cities of Australia. The percentage of
individuals
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is
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are
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is
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shown based on 3 categories namely those who bought fresh
coffee
, those with instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
and
who
Correct determiner usage
those who
show examples
went to a café for
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
. Among the five cities,
Sydney
have
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has
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maximum
Correct article usage
a maximum
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43
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of 43
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% of
residents
buying fresh
coffee
while
,
Hobart
have
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has
show examples
54% of local
individuals
buying instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
.
Additionally
,
Melbourne
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in Melbourne
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with
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apply
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63%
people
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of people
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visiting
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visited
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café to have
coffee
or
tea
in the past 4
weeks
. Among the
residents
buying fresh
coffee
,
Sydney
and
Melbourne
show similar 43% and 42% but,
Hobart
have
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has
show examples
38% people.
While
,
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apply
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Brisbane
and
Adelaide
also
present similar 34%
individuals
. Among the
individuals
buying instant
coffee
, on one
hand
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hand,
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Brisbane
and
Adelaide
have almost similar figures of 52% and 50%
while
,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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Sydney
with 45%,
Melbourne
with 48% and
Hobart
with 54%
residents
buying in the
last
4
weeks
. Among the
residents
visiting café for
coffee
or
tea
,
Sydney
,
Hobart
and
Melbourne
show similar values of 61%, 62% and 63%.
While
,
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apply
show examples
Brisbane
and
Adelaide
depict 55% and 49%
individuals
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of individuals
show examples
.
Therefore
, it is concluded that the
residents
of the 5 cities who bought fresh
coffee
were the lowest
while
, those who went to the café to have
coffee
or
tea
were the highest which shows people prefer to consume
coffee
at café which is not a health benefit for them.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, coffee, tea, weeks, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, individuals, café with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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