Art is considered as an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However these days fewer and fewer appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

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STEM education, which means the educational institution mostly
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on Science, Technology, Engineering,
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, in order to offer students a diploma, the schools'
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them to memorize information and take the test.
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are there will not only no room for passion but
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to that belief is because of the lack of Art Education. What I mean is in many education systems, art is not given the same priority as other subjects, leading to a lack of understanding and appreciation from a young age.
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Consider adding a brief introduction and conclusion to frame your essay. This helps readers understand your main argument and leaves them with a clear takeaway.
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You could provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention particular education systems or studies that show the emphasis on STEM over arts.
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Your essay presents a clear and understandable argument regarding the prioritized emphasis on STEM education over the arts.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas are logically structured and follow a consistent flow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • STEAM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Arts, Mathematics)
  • economic instability
  • public engagement
  • media promotion
  • grants
  • scholarships
  • viable career
  • economic benefits
  • digital entertainment
  • traditional forms of art
  • artistic endeavors
  • curriculum
  • comprehensive art education
  • public art programs
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