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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers.

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In the near future, new
technologies
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,
machines
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and machines
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 will be created by humans
such
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 as self-driving
cars
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.
It is clear that
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 there will not be
driver
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a driver
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 and passengers will be only travellers in these
cars
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. In my opinion, there will be a number of positives
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that might
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 outweigh the negatives. If we look at
advantages
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the advantages
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 of that notion, the period is changing day by day and new, comfortable and self-directed
technologies
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such
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 as
cars
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, servant robots and others. Now, the main point towards buses and trucks. If
cars
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 are driverless and self-driving, the safety system of the
cars
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 will be well considered.
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,
people
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 will reach their destination without high fear and some injuries. Another positive thing is that these self-driving
cars
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 and buses will be really comfortable and well-designed for older
people
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 because they might encounter some difficulties
of
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 driving
cars
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.
In addition
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, self-driving
cars
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 will manage to locate
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apply
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directions without congestion quickly. These are some advantages of these
cars
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. If we look at
another sides
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 of that we can see a number of negatives. If some technical issues
are appeared
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appear
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 in the system of
cars
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, a number of risks will
be emerged
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emerge
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 and they will be dangerous for human life. It is obvious,
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people
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that people
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 have
the
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a
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 sense of fear and it will affect to
choose
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these
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of these
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 types of
cars
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such
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 as self-driving
cars
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.
People
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 will reveal their disbelief
on
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in
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 these
cars
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 and they might reject
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them. In conclusion, we will start to face new
technologies
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such
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 as driverless
cars
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, buses,
trucks
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and trucks
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 and they will
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 to
utilize
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. I truly support these types of
cars
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 and other new and comfortable
technologies
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.
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logical structure
Improve the logical flow of your essay. Make sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next one.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction gives a clear opinion on the topic, which sets a good foundation for the essay.
complete response
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced view on the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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