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The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.
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The map
show
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shows
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a
Correct article usage
the
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 present layout of an
office
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 building and plans for its future redevelopment. Contained in the blueprints are the data pertaining to potential alternations of an
office
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 building. From an observational perspective, the adjacent grass fields will be replaced by new
office
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 facilities.
Additionally
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, the majority of current infrastructures will be relocated with kitchen and canteen are going to be demolished. Regarding the present
office
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 building, the
entrance
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 is placed in the bottom corner and next to four
office
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 rooms. At the top-right corner, there is a small WCs and a storeroom behind a restroom. Moving onto the top-left corner, a kitchen and a canteen are built in proximity to each other.
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, there are two immense grasslands on both the left and right sides of the building. Turning into the future building, the
entrance
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 will be relocated to the middle of the building, with two enlarged
office
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 rooms in
vicinity
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the vicinity
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it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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. On the opposite side of the
entrance
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 will be another two expanded room offices and a storeroom from the left to right. There will be a small
entrance
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 on the right side of the building which leads to the outdoor seating area and a bunch of chairs. On the right-hand side, the grass will reconstructed into a new meeting area with chairs, a coffee machine and a WCs

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, entrance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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