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The maps below show the changes in are after the constrcution of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in are after the constrcution of a hydroelectric power dam.
The maps below show the changes in are after the
constrcution
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construction
 of a hydroelectric power
dam
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. Contained in the maps are the data pertaining to the alternations of an
are
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area
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 after a hydroelectric power
dam
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 was built. From an observational perspective, a vast number of woods was cleaned to make way for a huge artificial lake.
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, the majority of mountainous areas
were remained
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remained
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 in place. Beginning in the north-west side, ancient structures and the surrounding forests were cleared and replaced with an enormous lake with many
school
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schools
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 of fish. Regarding north western side, as far as the mountains are concerned, all the irrigated fields
was
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were
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 demolished for the lake and a new hotel was built near the hydroelectric
dam
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. Regarding the
south-half
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south half
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, a hydroelectric
dam
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 was constructed between two large mountains and connected with numerous electric towers which head to two different directions.
Finnally
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, a small village was settled
along side
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alongside
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with
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apply
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the river
in
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apply
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adjacent to
a
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an
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 electricity tower.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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