The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided illustration describes the stages involved in the production of
sugar
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from
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cane. The process involves several steps,
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as harvesting, crushing, syrup-making, centrifuging, and ultimately, drying and cooling. As illustrated in the diagram, the
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cane plants are ready for processing when they have grown to the required stage, and initial manufacturing manipulations commence with their harvesting, which can be done either manually or through the use of machines. After that, the harvested
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canes undergo crushing by a crushing machine, producing juice, which is
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purified by the filter, which contains limestone.
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, purified juice is
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heated in an evaporator, which makes syrup from the initial substance.
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, the syrup is centrifuged, causing the separation of
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crystals from the syrup. The final step in the production of
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drying and chilling the almost-ready product in the special tanks.
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,
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canes pass through seven stages and two main variants to manufacture the complete product -
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. The
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is starting from growing
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cane and ends with drying and cooling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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