Crimes committed by young people are increasing in major cities throughout the world. Discuss the causes and how to solve this problem.

Crimes
have always been one notable
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in society and the age distribution of criminal actors is extensive. There are various
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types
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type
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types
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of
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criminals
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criminal
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criminals
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divided by age
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category
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categorize
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category
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and one
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concerned
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is juvenile
crime
. The are some possible factors that lead
underage
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do
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crimes
and in
this
essay
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we will discuss some causes. The majority of
crimes
are caused by
povetry
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poverty
and these are proven by many
researches
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that say criminal actors have
been
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live
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in low
socioeceonimics
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socioeconomic
background
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backgrounds
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and did
crime
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crimes
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to survive.
Furthermore
,
this
factor not only occurs in adult
crimes
, yet
the
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juvenile
crime
also
has
povetry
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poverty
poetry
as
excuse
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of
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the
crimes
. In the cities,
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a family
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family
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families
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from low
socioecomonic
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socioeconomic
socio-economic
backgorund
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backgrounds
struggling
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to survive and tend to do anything because of the need to survive.
For example
, in Indonesia, there are undearge that under arrest because steal
a
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medicine
for
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their parent and
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clearly
proof
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that
the
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povetry
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poverty
poetry
took
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a big part
of
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the cause of underage
crime
.
Furthermore
, the
povetry
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poverty
poetry
closely
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is closely
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related to lack of
education
because family from low socioeconomic
background
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backgrounds
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would put
education
as the
last
in their priority. As
result
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a result
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, children that has limited
access
to
education
are
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has difficult time
to
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differ what is right because sometimes in their environment, people
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to
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survive
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rather than
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about what is right and they
would following
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follow
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the usual
thing
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things
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in their
surrounding
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surroundings
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.
For example
, because of the
mininum
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minimum
access
to
education
,
a children
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children
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in Jakarta became
a
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robber
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because in their society it is a usual thing to do.
To sum up
, the majority
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factor
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factors
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of juvenile
crime
are
povetry
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poverty
and lack
access
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of access
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to
education
.
However
, the basic thing that could
do
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be done
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immedietely
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immediately
to
solving
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these problem
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is
help
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children from low socioeconomic
background
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backgrounds
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to
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access
education
.
For example
, the government should take
a
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part
to enhance
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in enhancing
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the
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access
for
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education
by giving
subsidy
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subsidies
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or
scholarship
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scholarships
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for
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people with low financial
family
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families
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.
This
suggestion can help decrease
number
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of
povetry
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poverty
poetry
because
education
could take
individual
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individuals
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to better opportunities and
along with
better
financial
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finances
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Socioeconomic factors
  • 2. Unemployment
  • 3. Poverty
  • 4. Access to education
  • 5. Dysfunctional family
  • 6. Parental supervision
  • 7. Peer pressure
  • 8. Social groups
  • 9. Substance abuse
  • 10. Impair judgment
  • 11. Criminal behavior
  • 12. Community resources
  • 13. Recreational activities
  • 14. Delinquency
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