The chart below shows the results of a survey about patients who stayed in different wards of a hospital. The chart also shows the percentage of patients who replied ‘very good’ about the various aspects of their hospital experience.
the chart provides information concerning the results of
satisfaction
survey in three different wards of the hospital about Correct article usage
a satisfaction
some
various aspects Correct quantifier usage
apply
by
the patient's experiences
generally speaking, there were Change preposition
of
above
50% of the patients Change preposition
than
was
very Correct subject-verb agreement
were
satisfying
Replace the word
satisfied
about
the hospital staff, the waiting time, the Change preposition
with
quality
of treatment may
Verb problem
apply
as
well the Correct word choice
and
quality
of aftercare in all wards of the hospital.
according to
the chart, the people in Holly Ward have a great experience in all aspects as seen as the result that more than 70% of them replied "very good" in the survey, and reach
90% in the Verb problem
apply
quality
of the treatment. on the other side, the survey's result in the mapple
ward Change the capitalization
Mapple
as well as
the oak
ward shows various yet lower Capitalize word
Oak
result
, it is in the range of 50% to 70% for each aspect.
Fix the agreement mistake
results
overall
, the patients were very pleased with the quality
of the treatment and feel the waiting time is something that the hospital can be
improve in the future.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
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