The chart below shows the results of a survey about patients who stayed in different wards of a hospital. The chart also shows the percentage of patients who replied ‘very good’ about the various aspects of their hospital experience.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about patients who stayed in different wards of a hospital. The chart also shows the percentage of patients who replied ‘very good’ about the various aspects of their hospital experience.
the chart provides information concerning the results of
satisfaction
Correct article usage
a satisfaction
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survey in three different wards of the hospital about
some
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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various aspects
by
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of
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the patient's experiences generally speaking, there were
above
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than
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50% of the patients
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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very
satisfying
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satisfied
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about
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with
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the hospital staff, the waiting time, the
quality
of treatment
may
Verb problem
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as
Correct word choice
and
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well the
quality
of aftercare in all wards of the hospital.
according to
the chart, the people in Holly Ward have a great experience in all aspects as seen as the result that more than 70% of them replied "very good" in the survey, and
reach
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apply
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90% in the
quality
of the treatment. on the other side, the survey's result in the
mapple
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Mapple
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ward
as well as
the
oak
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Oak
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ward shows various yet lower
result
Fix the agreement mistake
results
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, it is in the range of 50% to 70% for each aspect.
overall
, the patients were very pleased with the
quality
of the treatment and feel the waiting time is something that the hospital can
be
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improve in the future.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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