Some people say history is important subject and other say science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There is always a
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debate between
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who argue for
science
and those who argue for history. Though both are inevitable for human evolution,
Science
and technology grew civilization and shaped it the way they live today. When it comes to
science
and technology, Humans made
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extreme progress and it will continue
thoughout
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throughout
. Nowadays jobs pay more to
induviduals
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individuals
who use their brain higher than those who use their physical strength. The 6th sense in the brain placed Human
being
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above other living beings. But
people
themselves went above and beyond to a greater extent by using technological growth. Physically challenged can now move themselves using automated chairs. Growth in biological tech pushes life expectancy to
next
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level. With the amount of global population and increasing power demands are met by nuclear power plants which is quite inevitable and is one of the most efficient ways of power production. Though it contributed a lot, we could still not conclude scientific research
as
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an undisputed field of study Society should look back
in
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timeline
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to cherish their past and understand
the
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evolution is vital for anyone.
People
run faster behind
science
and
modern
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the modern
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world and
misses
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out
to look
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on the way they came so far. Getting to know
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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of men and women back in centuries would
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both fascinating and nostalgic. A mankind which fails to unveil
their
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roots will not bloom. Upholding a subject without considering the other is never a good idea. Though updating
the
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lives with tech feels awesome and exciting it is equally important to learn
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past and the way
people
lived those days.
Science
and
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research
reasearch
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research
keeps
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keep
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people
in safe hands from ancient flaws and history
gave
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has given
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a lot of insights about
ancestors
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the ancestors
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of today's humans
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