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*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
lines
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 graph shows the data about
dynamic
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the dynamic
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 of exporting issues of
there
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their
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 countries for 5 years.
Although
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, there
is
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rapid
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 increasing growth in Myanmar from 1999 when it was 0 which is the minimum, to the biggest point of 950
millions
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million
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of
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dollars in 2001.
On the other hand
 in
following
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the following
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 year demand
to
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 their clothes decreased sharply to the volume of 350 $
mln
.
However
,
then
 there was
positive
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 change in 2003. Obviously, we can see the best result for the
traiding
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training
trading
according to
 Myanmmar's data. It's average is 650 $
mln
. Meanwhile other two countries present fluent indicators which are illustrated by the graph. They are different at the start (450 $
mln
. and 580 $
mln
.), almost are equal in
the
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2000 (over 500$
mln
.). At the same time
their
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the highest and the lowest mark
is
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 rather different.
Furthermore
, the top rank to Japan is 600$
mln
.,
while
 to Columbia is 700 $
mln
.
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