The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billion) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billion) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The graph illustrates the total
minutes
of consumption on telephone calls in three different categories, namely local-fixed
line
, national and international-fixed
line
and
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calls, in the UK, between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
, over the
7 years
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7-year
period,
although
local calls conserved their popularity,
the
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spending time on other calls
have
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an upward
trend
.
In particular
, using mobile phones increased significantly.
At
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the beginning, in 1995, using the phone which has
fixed
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line
for local communication was the most popular preference among
public
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,
just
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over 70
billion
minutes
and demonstrated an upward
trend
. Even though
this
trend
peaked in 1998 (at 90
billion
minutes
), there was a decrease over the next three years and the total number of
minutes
was almost equivalent
with
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initial
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the initial
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value.
On the other hand
, national and international use of
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line
phone
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phones
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had a significant value with 37
billion
minutes
and soared steadily about by 23
billion
minutes
,
this
upward
trend
is
also
valid for the figures
of
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mobiles, especially, after 1999, using mobile phone for calls increased sharply from roughly 14 to 45
billion
minutes
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, trend, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telecommunications
  • Long-distance calls
  • Local calls
  • International calls
  • Duration
  • Fluctuation
  • Incline/Decline
  • Significant
  • Trend
  • Statistical data
  • Billion
  • Minutes
  • Graph/chart interpretation
  • Incremental growth
  • Stabilize
  • Peak
  • Dip
  • Plummet
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