Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than Secondary school. Do the advantage of this outweight the disadvantages?

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foreign
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better. If children
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learn at
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. Personally, I think primary
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learn
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language
. First of all, primary
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children
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than young secondary
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and
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at primary
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they learn one more
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learn one more
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. Because they
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know how to learn
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language
.
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. Easy to learn
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language
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new vocabulary that's all. I have a son. He is 6 years old. My family's plan is
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to London. Because
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children
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at primary
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. That's why we will move to London after couple
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later. We
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about
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my son's education and foreign
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important for us. If secondary
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age children
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idea about foreign
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not
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impossible
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foreign
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language
. Primary
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age easy because they are have
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open brain for
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. My son
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. He
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some words and
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. I believe that
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he will learn and speak faster than me in a year.
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The essay should clearly state the advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language at primary school compared to secondary school. Expand on both perspectives before concluding that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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