Some people say that now we can see films watching movies at home is easier and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, movies need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Developing technology and getting modern gadgets have made our
life
easier, so we are living in a more luxurious world Fix the agreement mistake
lives
compare
to the past. There Wrong verb form
compared
is have
people Wrong verb form
are
prefer
watching movies at Correct pronoun usage
who prefer
home
, thinking that it is more comfortable, despite others think
that Wrong verb form
thinking
cinema
makes films more thrilling. The impending essay will discuss both these views and show advantages
and drawbacks of these opinions.
Correct article usage
the advantages
Firstly
one of the main advantages of being at home
is comfort. Definitely modern technology gave
us enough opportunity to create our own Wrong verb form
has given
cinema
at home
by buying comfortable furnitures
, Change the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
plazma
Correct your spelling
plasma
Plazma
Tvs
, Correct your spelling
TVs
getting
Correct word choice
and getting
good
music system, so it is easier to shape your own space. It is better to watch a Correct article usage
a good
movie
in a comfortable position because you don't need to sit for hours like in a cinema
. Secondly
, home
supply
us a great flexibility because there is no need to schedule your time, you can watch the film whenever you want. Correct subject-verb agreement
supplies
Also
watching movies at home
can be a big social event by inviting your close friends, sharing
your opinions about Correct word choice
and sharing
movie
.
Add an article
the movie
In addition
to the ideas that was
shown Change the verb form
were
above
there Add a comma
above,
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
also
have
some drawbacks Unnecessary verb
apply
of
looking at a Change preposition
to
movie
at home
compared to being in cinema
. Going to the Add an article
the cinema
a cinema
cinema
is not only an action,
it is Add the word(s)
, but
also
an experience,
because watching a Remove the comma
apply
movie
with a complete strangers
and seeing their reactions through the Correct the article-noun agreement
complete strangers
a complete stranger
movie
makes it more amusing. Also
listening other
people's Change preposition
to other
laughters
or shocked expressions about the Change the wording
laughter
waves of laughter
touches of laughter
peals of laughter
movie
make
you Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
gave
more attention to Wrong verb form
give
movie
and makes it more Add an article
the movie
insteresting
. But Correct your spelling
interesting
unfortunately
cinemas are very expensive and today's circumstances Add a comma
unfortunately,
makes
it more difficult Change the verb form
make
going
outside with your family or friends. Change the verb form
to go
For instance
, in my country common
price for Correct article usage
the common
the
tickets is 10 manat, Correct article usage
apply
therefore
price
for Add an article
the price
the
family of three Correct article usage
a
will be
30 manat Wrong verb form
is
that
Correct word choice
which
it
considered expensive for us.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
is
i
think that Change the capitalization
I
whatching
a film at Correct your spelling
watching
cinema
is a better option to feel emotions completelyAdd an article
the cinema
Add the comma(s)
,
however
, nevertheless
looking at films at home
is more selectable when you think about comfort and price.Submitted by eminesixaliyeva on
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task achievement
Ensure to clearly state your thesis in the introduction and provide more structured arguments. For example, start with a sentence like: 'This essay will discuss both perspectives and will argue why watching films at home is more advantageous.'
coherence cohesion
Try to provide clearer transitions between paragraphs and arguments to enhance the logical flow of your essay, for instance, use phrases like 'on the other hand' to juxtapose contrasting views.
task achievement
Be cautious about grammatical and spelling errors to improve readability and professionalism, for instance, 'whatching' should be 'watching', 'plazma' should be 'plasma', and 'insteresting' should be 'interesting'.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized, with paragraphs dedicated to each viewpoint. This type of structure helps in maintaining clarity.
task achievement
You have provided specific examples to support your arguments, such as discussing the cost of cinema tickets in your country. This adds depth to your essay.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?