Some people say that now we can see films watching movies at home is easier and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, movies need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Developing technology and getting modern gadgets have made our
life
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easier, so we are living in a more luxurious world
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to the past. There
is have
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people
prefer
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who prefer
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watching movies at
home
, thinking that it is more comfortable, despite others
think
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thinking
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that
cinema
makes films more thrilling. The impending essay will discuss both these views and show
advantages
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the advantages
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and drawbacks of these opinions.
Firstly
one of the main advantages of being at
home
is comfort. Definitely modern technology
gave
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us enough opportunity to create our own
cinema
at
home
by buying comfortable
furnitures
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furniture
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,
plazma
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plasma
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Tvs
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,
getting
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good
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music system, so it is easier to shape your own space. It is better to watch a
movie
in a comfortable position because you don't need to sit for hours like in a
cinema
.
Secondly
,
home
supply
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us a great flexibility because there is no need to schedule your time, you can watch the film whenever you want.
Also
watching movies at
home
can be a big social event by inviting your close friends,
sharing
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and sharing
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your opinions about
movie
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the movie
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.
In addition
to the ideas that
was
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were
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shown
above
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above,
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there
is
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are
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also
have
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some drawbacks
of
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looking at a
movie
at
home
compared to being in
cinema
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the cinema
a cinema
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. Going to the
cinema
is not only an action
,
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, but
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it is
also
an experience
,
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because watching a
movie
with
a complete strangers
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complete strangers
a complete stranger
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and seeing their reactions through the
movie
makes it more amusing.
Also
listening
other
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to other
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people's
laughters
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laughter
waves of laughter
touches of laughter
peals of laughter
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or shocked expressions about the
movie
make
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makes
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you
gave
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give
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more attention to
movie
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the movie
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and makes it more
insteresting
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interesting
. But
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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cinemas are very expensive and today's circumstances
makes
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it more difficult
going
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to go
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outside with your family or friends.
For instance
, in my country
common
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the common
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price for
the
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apply
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tickets is 10 manat,
therefore
price
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the price
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for
the
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a
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family of three
will be
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is
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30 manat
that
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which
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it
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is
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considered expensive for us. In conclusion,
i
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I
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think that
whatching
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watching
a film at
cinema
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the cinema
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is a better option to feel emotions completely
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,
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however
,
nevertheless
looking at films at
home
is more selectable when you think about comfort and price.
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task achievement
Ensure to clearly state your thesis in the introduction and provide more structured arguments. For example, start with a sentence like: 'This essay will discuss both perspectives and will argue why watching films at home is more advantageous.'
coherence cohesion
Try to provide clearer transitions between paragraphs and arguments to enhance the logical flow of your essay, for instance, use phrases like 'on the other hand' to juxtapose contrasting views.
task achievement
Be cautious about grammatical and spelling errors to improve readability and professionalism, for instance, 'whatching' should be 'watching', 'plazma' should be 'plasma', and 'insteresting' should be 'interesting'.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized, with paragraphs dedicated to each viewpoint. This type of structure helps in maintaining clarity.
task achievement
You have provided specific examples to support your arguments, such as discussing the cost of cinema tickets in your country. This adds depth to your essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • streaming services
  • on-demand
  • home entertainment
  • cost-effectiveness
  • concessions
  • immersive experience
  • social environment
  • film revenue
  • visual effects
  • nostalgia
  • memorable experiences
  • 3D
  • IMAX
  • interactive seats
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • limited mobility
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