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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
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The presented diagram illustrated the proportion of the British setting aside money
to
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 donations
by
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 periods between 1990 and 2010 It can be clearly seen from the bar chart that the number of
volunteer
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 in 1990,there was
a
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higher than in 2010.The individual spent the highest budget on donations at the age of 36-50 ( in 1990) meanwhile Britain people
expenditured
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expenditure
expenditures
 the lowest
the
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tally of aid by 18-25 ages (in 2010) Looking at the graph more closely ,one can see that regarding
of
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18-25 ages ,the statistic of the unpaid
worker
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 stood at 17%
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 in ages,there was a rapid climb during in 1990 and 2010 .
This
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figue
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 for donations
were
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 at 42% and 34% respectively in 1990 and in 2010. As is described ,in the age of 51-65 ,there was a steady drop in the total of British
nonprofessional
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 at 35% in 1990.
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 that,in 2010 , the residents in
UK
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 accounted for about 39% . What’s more,over the age of 65 ,there was a gradual decline in the
quantity
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 of
inhabittans
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inhabitants
 at 32% and 35% correspondingly in 1990 and 2010
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