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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was developed in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Contained in two illustrations is information pertaining to the transformation of a library's ground floor between 2001 and 2009. From an observational perspective, there has been an increase in the book categories
whereas
 new public amenities were added.
Additionally
, the two facilities in the vicinity of the entrance and the entrance itself remained intact. Beginning with the left wing, there used to be
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 and history books on the shelf but now, they were downsized to make place for 4 extra categories. At the back of the building, the fiction materials were replaced by children's
literatures
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literature
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,
together
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 with the space in front of it, formed a children's area.
Moreover
, there was a removal of the old tables at the
center
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 of the plan to install new bigger tables. Moving onto the right-hand side, the newspapers and periodicals site was converted into an area for films and DVDs
while
 beside that, two computers
was
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 installed. Turning back to the front of the hall, the stairs in the bottom right corner and the librarian's desk stayed the same.
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task achievement
In your task response, you've effectively summarized the main features of the transformations. However, adding specific measurements or data mentioned in the illustrations could make your response even more precise.
task achievement
Avoiding minor grammatical errors and improving sentence structures will enhance clarity. For example, 'children's literatures' should be 'children's literature' and 'two computers was installed' should be 'two computers were installed.'
coherence cohesion
The essay's coherence and cohesion are good with a logical structure, but you could benefit from more connective words or phrases to give a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Broaden the use of vocabulary to prevent repetition and make the essay more engaging. For instance, instead of repeatedly saying 'there was a removal,' you could use 'was removed,' 'was replaced,' or 'took out.'
task achievement
You clearly identified the main changes between 2001 and 2009, such as the addition of new book categories and amenities.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a logical sequence, making it easy to follow the changes described.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ground floor
  • library
  • development
  • combined space
  • versatile
  • entrance
  • layout
  • restructured
  • reading/study area
  • computer area
  • technological advancements
  • digital resources
  • dedicated
  • community engagement
  • bookshelves
  • multifunctional spaces
  • media area
  • incorporating
  • information
  • entertainment resources
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