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The picture depicts information about the process of drinkable water produced in an Australian city. Overall, there are two stages including a physical water filter and chemicals water filter.

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The picture depicts information about the process of drinking
water
 produced in an Australian city.
Overall
, there are two stages including a physical
water
 filter and a chemical
water
 filter. The first stage begins when rainwater drops from the cloud into citizen houses, and
then
water
 collects and flows to drainage pipes through the residence area.
Furthermore
, the
water
 filter had various screen sizes to separate
water
 from dirt, germs, and bacteria. So, the litter can be thrown away into landfills
while
 the
water
 will continue to the next stage.
Secondly
, the
water
 towards the huge storage
water
 treatment plant adds chemical materials to control the pH to around 7,
this
 process will make
water
 clear,
odorless
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, and safe to consume by humans. Ultimately, the
water
 pump will deliver the drinkable
water
 into the house's area. All of the people can enjoy the fresh
water
 every day.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that transitions between stages are clearly marked and use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
task achievement
Provide more details or specific examples about the screen sizes and the types of chemicals used.
task achievement
Make sure each step of the process is clearly and thoroughly explained, avoiding any ambiguity.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and concise introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The stages of the water filtration process are outlined in a logical order, providing a good understanding of the overall system.

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