The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the in formation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below  shows  how  frequently  people  in  the USA ate in  fast food restaurants  between 2003 and  2013.

Summarise the in formation  by  selecting  and  reporting  the main features, and make comparisons  where relevant.
The frequency of eating at fast
food
restaurants among
people
in the USA was increasing and decreasing , every day in 2003 ,2006 and 2006
not
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does not
did not
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have
realy diferent
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really different
statistic
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statistics
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, in several
time
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times
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a
weeek
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week
there is a huge
diferent
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difference
different
than “
evryday
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everyday
” diagram it means part of half
people
in us still caring
abaout
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about
their healthy because in the “once a week” diagram it shows more
people
than “several
time
in a week” ,
percentation
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presentation
about
people
who
eats
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eat
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fast
food
once or twice a month
its
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it's
it is
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slighly
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slightly
same with once a week ,but
people
who never
eats
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eat
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fast
food
or just eats it a few
time
in years just a part of a half
people
in US . Lately,fast
food
being the first choice for
people
, because the
proces
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process
of making it
has
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takes
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a
litle
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little
bit of
time
,
instead
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of loking
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loking
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looking
for healthy
food
,
people
just looking for
food
that
have
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has
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a good taste
in
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on
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their tongue , they
doesnt
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don't
care about their healthy,they just enjoy the
food
without thinking about the
consequenses
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consequences
that will come because the minim of knowledge about
danger
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the danger
show examples
of fast
food
, they know if they
eats
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eat
show examples
fast
food
every day they can
got
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get
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a
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apply
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obesity , but the reality not all
realy
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really
care about it . they think if they
doesnt
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don't
buy fast
food
they will
wasting
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waste
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time
enough to wait the
proces
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process
of it.
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