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Nowadays traffic related issues are worse in many countries. identify the reasons and give solutions.

#traffic #countries
One of the widely discussed
problem
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 nowadays is
traffic
 on
roads
. The
big
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heavy
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traffic
 on
roads
 become an essential part of our life. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 is less of the
roads
. We have a lot of factors which are reasons. First of all, it is
lack
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a lack
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 of
roads
.
For example
, nowadays we have just two sides of
roads
 with one band on each road. Because of that we spend a lot of our time and
appears
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see
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 a
traffic
 jam.
Second
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reason
it
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is
do
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that it does
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 not
having
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have
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a
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a road
roads
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roads
 for bicycles and motorbikes. They are the main
reason
in
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for
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 a lot of jams. Because they can
make
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cause
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 accidents.
Third
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reason
it
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is not obeying the rules. Plenty of
drivers
 usually do not submit the rules on the
roads
.
For instance
, they just squeeze into another lane of the
roads
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road
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 or do not stop
on
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at
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 the red
traffic
 light. All of those aspects
makes
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make
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 the crowd of cars on the
roads
. To
take
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solve
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this
problems
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problem
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 government should
built
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build
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 two or three
roads
 for
a
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the
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 comfort of
drivers
 so that
drivers
 have a choice to choose the road
for
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to
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missing
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avoid
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 the jams. Nowadays variety of teenagers just take
the
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their
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parents
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parent's
parents'
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 or
siblings
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siblings'
sibling's
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 car and drive around the city
with
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at
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 crazy speed.
For
this
reason
, all
drivers
 should have
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their
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the
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their
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 own license with all passing exams
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apply
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about
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driving. Obviously,
drivers
also
 must observe the rules owing to all must respect each
drivers
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driver
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 and
do
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not take their time by their non-subordination. In conclusion,
for
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to
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 escape the
traffic
 on
roads
 around the world and get rid of the global
problem
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problems
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in
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apply
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this
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these
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 days we should do the best
as
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apply
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we can.
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Main points regarding the reasons for traffic issues are well identified.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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