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Nowadays traffic related issues are worse in many countries. identify the reasons and give solutions.

One of the widely discussed
problem
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 nowadays is
traffic
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 on
roads
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. The
big
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heavy
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traffic
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 on
roads
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 become an essential part of our life. One of the main
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reason
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reasons
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 is less of the
roads
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. We have a lot of factors which are reasons. First of all, it is
lack
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a lack
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 of
roads
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.
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, nowadays we have just two sides of
roads
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 with one band on each road. Because of that we spend a lot of our time and
appears
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see
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 a
traffic
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 jam.
Second
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reason
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it
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is
do
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 not
having
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a
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a road
roads
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roads
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 for bicycles and motorbikes. They are the main
reason
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in
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for
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 a lot of jams. Because they can
make
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cause
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 accidents.
Third
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reason
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it
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is not obeying the rules. Plenty of
drivers
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 usually do not submit the rules on the
roads
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.
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, they just squeeze into another lane of the
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roads
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road
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 or do not stop
on
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at
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 the red
traffic
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 light. All of those aspects
makes
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 the crowd of cars on the
roads
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. To
take
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solve
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this
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problems
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problem
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 government should
built
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build
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 two or three
roads
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 for
a
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the
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 comfort of
drivers
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 so that
drivers
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 have a choice to choose the road
for
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to
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missing
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avoid
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 the jams. Nowadays variety of teenagers just take
the
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their
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parents
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parent's
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 or
siblings
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siblings'
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 car and drive around the city
with
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at
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 crazy speed.
For
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this
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reason
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, all
drivers
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 should have
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the
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their
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 own license with all passing exams
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apply
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about
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apply
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driving. Obviously,
drivers
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also
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 must observe the rules owing to all must respect each
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drivers
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driver
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 and
do
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not take their time by their non-subordination. In conclusion,
for
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to
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 escape the
traffic
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 on
roads
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 around the world and get rid of the global
problem
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problems
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in
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apply
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this
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these
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 days we should do the best
as
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apply
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we can.

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task achievement
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supported main points
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task achievement
Clear understanding of the topic with a reasonably complete response.
supported main points
Main points regarding the reasons for traffic issues are well identified.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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