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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provided predicts based on the minimum daily requirement per
person
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 of 11.5 litres that figures were about the daily
cost
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 of water per
person
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 in five different
countries
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.
Overall
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,there were five different
countries
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comparison
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in comparison
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 with daily
cost
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 per
person
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(us dollars) and
cost
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 as a percentage of average daily wage.Apparently, Tanzania was paid 6.4
cents
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 dollars afford water
expense
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 each day that was highest in comparison with the US country was the lowest paid
cost
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expense
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 merely 0.85
cents
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.
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,the Tanzania paid highest
cost
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 as a ratio to the average daily
salary
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,
on the contrary
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,the US just spent 0.85 each day.
Moreover
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,the spent
expense
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 occupy less than 1% only 0.006% it let me astonishment.The second was Uganda paid 4.1
cents
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 per
person
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 each day,
then
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 which spent 3.2% of average daily
salary
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. Pakistan paid 1.76
cents
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 per
person
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,
then
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 occupied 1.1% of the average daily
salary
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.The
last
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 country was the UK which paid 1.3
cents
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 and only just occupied 0.013% of the average daily wage.
To sum up
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,obviously, the graph was five different
countries
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 about the
cost
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 in comparison with
salary
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 occupy situation,
besides
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 there three
countries
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 was difficult short water lead to increased
expense
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 with lower
salary
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 paid.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, cost, countries, cents, expense, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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