The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below shows information about calorie consumption in seven countries in 1975 and 2000. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The
bar chart illustrates the amount of calories that
are
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consumed by people in seven different countries between the years 1975 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
calorie consumption in all countries
increases
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in the second year of record.
Moreover
, Bangladesh came in
last
place in both years.
To begin
with, in 1975, the number of
individual's
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calorie consumption in Brazil accounted for 2,500 and came in first place followed by Pakistan and Nigeria which were at approximately 2,300 and 2,100 respectively.
Furthermore
, the other four countries comprising China, Indonesia, India and Bangladesh had almost the same number, at roughly 2,000.
Additionally
,
Brazil
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Brazil's
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calories noticeably climbed to around 3,000 in the year 2000
as well
as
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and
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China and Indonesia dramatically went up to almost the same level as
Brazil
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Brazil's
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. Pakistan and India
also
escalated to well under 2,500.
Besides
, the narrowest gap was seen in Bangladesh which was about 300.
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