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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selectingand reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selectingand reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the romantic relationship situations of the people of
Canada
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 and
Australia
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 in which the data are presented as percentages. The majority of the population from both countries involved themselves in romantic relationships
although
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 a high proportion of them later separated. A few people from the two places never married, or were widowed or divorced. Same-sex marriages did not occur in
Australia
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. More than half the population (53%) of
Canada
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 were separated from their partner.
However
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, the percentage was slightly lower in
Australia
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, where it was only 41%. Only 29% of Canadians were married,
whereas
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 46% of Australians were in a marriage. To summarise, Canadians showed a higher possibility of separation. In both countries, only a small minority of the people were single, widowed and divorced.
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, only 15% fit into either of the categories in
Canada
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 and 13% in
Australia
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.
Canada
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 saw 3% of same-sex marriage as opposed to
Australia
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 where there was none.
Submitted by Mangalakumaran.sangeetha on

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • marital status
  • population
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • notable
  • widowed
  • divorced
  • single
  • married
  • category
  • segment
  • distribution
  • highlight
  • similarities
  • differences
  • data
  • represent
  • summarize
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