University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more and more
people
choose to continue learning in university in lieu of apprenticeships, and arguments have persisted as to whether
students
should pay for college or not. From my perspective, I
am strongly believe
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that all
students
should not have free tuition
fee
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fees
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. On the one hand, free schooling offers tons of opportunities to all kinds of
people
.
This
means that whether
students
are from an upper class or an underclass, they can all have a chance to acquire and acknowledge academic knowledge.
Therefore
, youngsters may achieve promising professional prospects, which will not only improve their standard of living but
also
make the city more developed.
For example
, an experiment was conducted by a university in Vietnam in 2020, where a specific major was free for all
people
. The result was that 84% of
students
attending
this
subject had proper jobs, and more than half of those were from disadvantaged families.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
in
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giving free education.
To begin
with, schools need money to operate teachers and maintain the quality of their teaching. In fact, if everything is free, hardly any teachers will work there, so the quality will probably go down. Not only that,
people
usually do not appreciate or put effort into anything
that is
free.
For instance
, at some of the
highest ranked
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universities in the world,
such
as Havard or Oxford, scholarships are only achieved by 3–5
percent
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of pupils, so they have to be extraordinary to have a free tuition fee. If everything is free, talented
people
will not get attention, as everyone has free education. In conclusion, I am against the idea that university education will be free of charge for all
people
, but individuals with achievements and talent should have special offers.
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grammar
Review grammar and word choice to eliminate minor errors. For instance, 'strongly believe' rather than 'strongly believe' and 'tuition fees' instead of ‘tuition fee.'
task response
Ensure that each argument is directly related to your stance. For example, clarify how offering free education may impact educational quality and not just focus on the disadvantages of 'anything free.'
task response
Good job mentioning relevant examples, such as the Vietnamese university experiment, to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, which enhances readability.

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