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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives
infromation
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information
 about the rate of
hours
 every teacher spent teaching in various schools in many countries in the year 2001.
Overall
, the chart
illustrated
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illustrates
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 a group of countries
that
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apply
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namely Japan , Spain ,
USA
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the USA
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 and Iceland . With three types and as can be
seen
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seen,
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 the highest number was in the
USA
 . First of all, there was a significant increase at upper ar
initially
 to reach the hit peak in the
last
 period to accounted for approximately 1200 at the same in the beginning the orange line was growth till middle period after that decline moderately
then
improvement
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 quickly at
USA
 figure . in primary's
Japsn strated
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Japan started
 to reach the
munber
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number
 of
hours
 600
hours
 following that
a
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an
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 upward trend in Spain after which
decreas
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decrease
decreased
 in rate's Iceland and the
bule
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blue
 line in
USA
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the USA
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 was
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a surge
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surge
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surged
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 to Made up above 700
hours
 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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