The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lot of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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Over the past few decades, there has been a notable trend of
people
migrating from rural areas to urban
centers
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, resulting in a host of challenges for both
cities
and villages. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the primary issues arising from
this
phenomenon and propose potential solutions to address these complex problems. First of all, mass migration creates a plethora of problems
such
as rising
houses price
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house prices
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and
traffic
congestion. To illustrate,
people
are moving to
cities
for better
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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or jobs and
due to
this
trend number of dwellers
are
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higher compared to land
consequently
property dealers doubled the
houses
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price
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prices
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.
Secondly
, more
people
more cars and more
traffic
. It has been observed in
last
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couple of years that metropolitan
cities
are facing
traffic
jams.
For example
, in
Japan
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Japan,
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several
people
moved to Shanghai from
countryside
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the countryside
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and now they are
spending1
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spending 1
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hours
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in
traffic
every morning.
However
, just as every lock has a key, every problem has a solution. To mitigate
this
issue, the government can build better infrastructure to reduce
traffic
congestion.
For example
, in Mumbai, the population density is three times higher than the geographical area can comfortably support, but
due to
improved road infrastructure,
people
rarely experience
traffic
jams.
Similarly
, by developing advanced construction projects in and around
cities
, the government and property developers can help reduce housing inflation.
To sum up
, the trend of migration from rural areas to urban
centers
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is unlikely to cease, and it is expected that even more
people
will move to
cities
in the future. By introducing better infrastructure and promoting development, we can effectively manage and mitigate the issues arising from
this
ongoing migration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exacerbation
  • infrastructure stress
  • depopulation
  • economic stagnation
  • environmental degradation
  • breakdown of family units
  • traditional lifestyles
  • urban unemployment
  • underemployment
  • rural development programs
  • public transport
  • remote and flexible working
  • urban green spaces
  • community-based projects
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