The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.
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This
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line chart demonstrates how many
grams
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of
meat
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were consumed by European citizens weekly from 1979 to 2004. In general,
chicken
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meat
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showed gradual growth and fish
meat
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indicated steady growth of
grams
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in the whole year. Unfortunately,
beef
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and
lamb
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experienced a gradual decrease in
grams
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. In 1979, European people mostly ate
beef
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, about 210
grams
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per week, followed by
lamb
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with 150
grams
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per week. Several years later, the consumption of
chicken
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surpassed
lamb
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, from approximately 140
grams
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to 170
grams
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, making
chicken
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meat
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ranked second below
beef
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. In 1989, the number of
grams
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of
beef
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exceeded
chicken
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because it went down. At the same time, fish
meat
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showed steady growth from the beginning. From 1994 to 1999, the number of
grams
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of
lamb
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started to rise even though it went down the following year. From 1999 to 2004,
chicken
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experienced a rapid surge, from roughly 230
grams
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to 247
grams
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. At the same time, the trend of
beef
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and
lamb
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consumed by European citizens plummeted drastically, to 120
grams
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and 70
grams
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, respectively.
Nevertheless
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, fish demonstrated a small increase in
grams
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during
this
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period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, meat, chicken, beef, lamb with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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