The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.
This
line chart demonstrates how many
grams
of
meat
were consumed by European citizens weekly from 1979 to 2004. In general,
chicken
meat
showed gradual growth and fish
meat
indicated steady growth of
grams
in the whole year. Unfortunately,
beef
and
lamb
experienced a gradual decrease in
grams
. In 1979, European people mostly ate
beef
, about 210
grams
per week, followed by
lamb
with 150
grams
per week. Several years later, the consumption of
chicken
surpassed
lamb
, from approximately 140
grams
to 170
grams
, making
chicken
meat
ranked second below
beef
. In 1989, the number of
grams
of
beef
exceeded
chicken
because it went down. At the same time, fish
meat
showed steady growth from the beginning. From 1994 to 1999, the number of
grams
of
lamb
started to rise even though it went down the following year. From 1999 to 2004,
chicken
experienced a rapid surge, from roughly 230
grams
to 247
grams
. At the same time, the trend of
beef
and
lamb
consumed by European citizens plummeted drastically, to 120
grams
and 70
grams
, respectively.
Nevertheless
, fish demonstrated a small increase in
grams
during
this
period.
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