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The line graph shows the prison population in a European country between 1911 and 2001.

The line graph shows the prison population in a European country between 1911 and 2001.
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The given line graph illustrates the
number
 of prisoners
in
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of
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 two genders in a country in
European
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Europe
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 from 1911 to 2001.
Overall
,
male
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the male
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 prison population increased
while
female
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females
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 decreased.
Additionally
, the
number
 of boys
went
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who went
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 to prison
higher
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was higher
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 than the girls
at the end
 of the timeframe. Looking at
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the male
a male
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male
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males
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 in
further
details
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detail
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, the
number
 of
male
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males
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went
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who went
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 to prison was nearly 20,000 at the start and remained stable
the
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for the
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 next ten years before
dropped
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 down
about
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to about
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 half the
number
prisoners
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of prisoners
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 in 1911
then
rise
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rose
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 up again
during
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between
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 1951 and 1971. Between 1971 and 1981, the
amount
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number
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 of prisoners increased significantly to approximately double the population at the beginning and
continue
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continued
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 to
went
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go
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 up to around 45,000
at the end
 of the period.
Turing
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 to the female, starting at about 3,100 and went down rapidly the next 40 years to under 1,000 in 1941 before
increased
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 slowly up to around 1,800 in 2001.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • steady rise
  • sharp decline
  • plateau
  • spike
  • dip
  • trend
  • peak
  • period
  • decade
  • stable
  • significant change
  • historical context
  • socio-political factors
  • implications
  • legal system
  • economy
  • social services
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