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THE DIAGRAM BELOW SHOWS HOW ONE TYPE OF COAL IS USED TO PRODUCE ELECTRICITY. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.

THE DIAGRAM BELOW SHOWS HOW ONE TYPE OF COAL IS USED TO PRODUCE ELECTRICITY. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.
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CONTAINED IN THE DIAGRAM IS INFORMATION PERTAINING TO MANUFACTURING
ELECTRICITY
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 PROCEDURE FROM COAL.
OVERALL
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, IT IS A COMPLEX PROCESS, COMMENCING WITH THE COLLECTION OF RAW MATERIALS FROM COAL MINES AND CULMINATING WITH THE COMPLETED
ELECTRICITY
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 READY FOR BOTH FACTORY AND HOUSEHOLD PURPOSES. THE PROCEDURE COMMENCES WITH MINING AND GATHERING COAL FROM UNDERGROUND SOURCES,
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 COAL IS CRUSHED INTO PARTICLES. AFTER THE CRUSHING STEP, COAL IS TRANSPORTED VIA A TRUCK TO A SITE WHERE COAL IS GASIFIED AND HEATED TO CONSTITUDE
GAS
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 FORM. AFTER BEING COOLED, HEAT IS RELEASED AS AN ABUNDANT WATSE. FORMING
ELECTRICITY
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 FOR DISTRIBUTION IS THE MAIN FOCUS OF THE LATTER STEPS. AFTER THE COOLING PROCESS, THE
GAS
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 IS PURIFIED TO EXCLUDE THE DIRTY PARTICLES AND IMPURITIES. EVENTUALLY,
GAS
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 IS MOVED TO A
GAS
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 POWER PLANT WHERE
ELECTRICITY
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 IS PRODUCED TO SUPPLY RESIDENTIAL SITES AND PLANTS.
IN ADDITION
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, HEAT IS CONCURRENTLY DISSIPATED IN THE FINAL STEP.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coal mining
  • Open-pit mining
  • Transportation logistics
  • Power plant
  • Pulverized coal
  • Combustion
  • Boiler
  • Steam generation
  • Turbines
  • Kinetic energy
  • Electrical energy
  • Generator
  • Cooling and condensing
  • Recycling
  • Electricity transmission
  • National grid
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