The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrated the
amount
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of mature
people
in
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of
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each
aged
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that used
the
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social networking sites day by day between 2003 and 2006.
This
chart
measure
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the unit in the
percentage
.
Overall
it can be observed that in 2006
people
who
reach
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were
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from 25 to 65
years
old
are
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got the highest
percentage
, whilst all individuals
from
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all
aged
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in 2003
that
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got the lowest
percentage
.
Moreover
,
people
from 25-54 in all
year
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years
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got respectively the same. Starting with all
person
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people
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who
in
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is
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2006, it showed that the
percentage
begin
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began
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at around 85% and decreased significantly to 20% when
people
got older, who
reach
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reached
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65
years
old
up ward
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upward
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. Moving onto 2003 from 16-54 aged it got a deep between
these
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group of
people
at 80% to 60%, before it
start
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to
dropped
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steadily
into
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to
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nearly 18% at 65
years
old
people
.
Turnning
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Turning
to the
remaning
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remaining
statistic,
people
in 2004
is start
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started
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the same as
2003
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in 2003
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at 80% and got
a
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deep to nearly 70% at an adult
then
it
felt
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fell
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considerably to 19% from 65+
people
.
Last
but not least in 2005 the number
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started
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at 100%, which was outnumbered
others
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other
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years
then
it dropped slightly to nearly 17%
at
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for
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old
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the old
an old
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person
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people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, percentage, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age group
  • daily internet use
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • upward/downward trend
  • year-wise
  • distribution
  • fluctuation
  • highest/lowest
  • technological advancements
  • social changes
  • targeted marketing
  • internet usage patterns
  • technological familiarity
  • lifestyle
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