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The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
The bar chart illustrates how many
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 of passengers on five different types of transport in the United Kingdom
from
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between
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 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, the total of
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kilometers
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kilometres
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travelling
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travelled
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 was
an
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increase
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 by passengers.
In addition
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, buses and trains were significantly more popular except for bicycle, air and motorbike
ovet
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over
 the period. Looking at the figures in
further
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 detail, it can be seen that the number of
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 travelled by bus was the highest roughly 40
billion
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 and followed by rail just under 40
billion
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. In 2000, the figure for total passengers rose from 100 to 110
billion
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kilometers
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kilometres
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. Turning to the remaining statistics, both
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
motorbike
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motorbikes
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 in 1990
was
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were
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 larger than
2000
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in 2000
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 around 1 and 2
billion
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 except for the figure for air in 2000 rose slightly
about
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by about
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 2
billion
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometers, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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