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THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph compares five different regions in terms of arrivals of international
tourist
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.
Overall
, all countries considered an
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, the USA and France
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experienced some fluctuations
increased
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,
while
other
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the other
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 three regions considered a small
increase
. As the
grap
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graph
 shows, The
USA
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USA's
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 figure started at 70
millions
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million
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 tourists and experienced a small
increase
 to around 85
millions
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million
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,
then
, the international
tourist
 arrival
keep
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 climbed to approximately 90
millions
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million
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 and declined slightly to about 89 million between 2005 and 2010, respectively. Regarding
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France
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France's
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 international
tourist
 arrivals, it
was
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started at 50
millions
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million
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,
then
 it experienced steady growth to just over 60
millions
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million
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 in 2000.
Afterward
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, the number of international
tourist
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tourists
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was
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increaed
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increased
 to reach
the
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 peak
with
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 exactly 89
milions
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millions
million
 the same as the USA in the same year
of
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in
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 2010. By
constrast
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contrast
, between 1995 to 2010, Malaysia experienced a small
increase
 from over 20
millions
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million
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 to over 40
millions
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million
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. Meanwhile, Egypt and Brazil started at the same 10
millions
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million
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 in 1995 and
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 slightly to about 18
millions
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million
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 and 15
millions
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million
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, increase, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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