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The chart below compares the water consumed for different purposes in six world areas

The chart below compares the water consumed for different purposes in six world areas
The chart below compares the
water
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 consumed for different
purposes
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 in six world areas.
Overall
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,
water
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 is most widely used for industrial and agricultural
purposes
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 worldwide.
However
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, it is preferable to use
water
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 for agricultural
purposes
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 in Africa, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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. Looking at the details, the largest proportion of
water
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, 48%, and 53% is used for industrial
purposes
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 in North America and Europe, followed by agricultural
purposes
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, which account for 39% and 32%, respectively. Compared with North America, South America uses more
water
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 for agriculture (71%). Over 80% of
water
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 is consumed for agriculture in Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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,
whereas
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water
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 for domestic
purposes
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 uses around 7%. There is no significant difference between North American and European uses of
water
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 for domestic (13% and 15%, respectively).
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
water
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 for domestic is more than twice as high as that of industrial aim.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purposes, asia with synonyms.
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