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Writing Task 1: The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing Task 1: The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph offers valuable insights into the number of participants in
four ball
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 games –
rugby
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,
tennis
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,
basketball
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, and
badminton
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 – over a two-decade period from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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,
while
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rugby
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 experienced a significant decline in
popularity
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 over time,
tennis
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 exhibited a contrasting upward trend.
Basketball
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 and
badminton
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,
however
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, remained relatively stable, showing only minor fluctuations. In 1985,
rugby
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 was the leading sport with approximately 140
players
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. Over the next decade, its
popularity
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 steadily increased, and by 1995, it matched
tennis
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 with 200
players
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 each.
However
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,
following
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this
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 peak,
rugby
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's
popularity
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 sharply declined, falling to just 50
players
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 by 2005, aligning it with the number of
badminton
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 participants.
On the other hand
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,
tennis
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 began as the second most popular sport in 1985 with 150
players
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. By 1995, it had surpassed
rugby
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 and continued to see a modest increase, culminating in around 240
players
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 by the end of the period. In 1985,
basketball
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 and
badminton
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 started as the least popular sports, drawing around 80 and 60
players
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 respectively. Both sports experienced minimal declines in participation, with
badminton
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 losing just under 10
players
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 in the first five years. Over the years, their
popularity
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 followed similar patterns, ending with approximately 80
players
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 for
basketball
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 and 50 for
badminton
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 by the close of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rugby, tennis, basketball, badminton, popularity, players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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