The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. ( task 1, cam 13 test 1)
The two drawings illustrate the data
of
the entrance to the town hospital in 2007 compared to 2010.
In overview, there is a comparison between the buildings and roads entering the hospital during the years 2007 Change preposition
on
as well as
2010.
To begin
with, in 2007, the plan wasn't bigger than that of 2010, this
is clearly shown by the extensions along the site and roads.Additionally
, on the East of the map, in 2007, there was bus
stop whilst in 2010 they created a roundabout on the same spot.Correct article usage
a bus
Moreover
, they opened an entrance through public
car park along the ring road in the year 2010.
Correct article usage
a public
Furthermore
, double new roundabouts were also
introduced along the hospital way and the bus station was enlarged compared to the old one in 2007.Therefore
, in 2007 staff and public parking were built on the same campus, however
, in 2010 they preffered
to separate them into two different positions.Correct your spelling
preferred
prefer
Lastly
, as it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
shown
in the plans above, Add the auxiliary verb
is shown
2010
plan was modern and organised Correct article usage
the 2010
comparing
to Change the form of the verb
compared
2007
sketch map.Correct article usage
the 2007
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