The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. ( task 1, cam 13 test 1)

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. ( task 1, cam 13 test 1)
The two drawings illustrate the data
of
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the entrance to the town hospital in 2007 compared to 2010. In overview, there is a comparison between the buildings and roads entering the hospital during the years 2007
as well as
2010.
To begin
with, in 2007, the plan wasn't bigger than that of 2010,
this
is clearly shown by the extensions along the site and roads.
Additionally
, on the East of the map, in 2007, there was
bus
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stop whilst in 2010 they created a roundabout on the same spot.
Moreover
, they opened an entrance through
public
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a public
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car park along the ring road in the year 2010.
Furthermore
, double new roundabouts were
also
introduced along the hospital way and the bus station was enlarged compared to the old one in 2007.
Therefore
, in 2007 staff and public parking were built on the same campus,
however
, in 2010 they
preffered
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preferred
prefer
to separate them into two different positions.
Lastly
, as
it
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apply
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shown
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in the plans above,
2010
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the 2010
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plan was modern and organised
comparing
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to
2007
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the 2007
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sketch map.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • located
  • situated
  • layout
  • infrastructure
  • facility
  • public transport
  • bus route
  • roundabout
  • intersection
  • development
  • modification
  • enhancement
  • access
  • comparison
  • previously
  • subsequently
  • provide access to
  • implement
  • upgrade
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