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Đề 1:The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four different modes of transport.

Đề 1:The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The graph
Illustrates
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illustrates
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 the numbers of
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cargo
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cargoes
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cargo
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 transported in the
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uk
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UK
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 between 1974 and 2002 by four kinds of
mean
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the mean
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 of transport.
Overall
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, the quantity of goods transported in the
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Uk
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UK
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 during the period shown increased except for
rail way
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railway
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, which fluctuated.
With starting
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, In 1974,
the
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apply
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most
of
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goods In The
UK
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was
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 delivered by road, with about 10
million
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tonnes
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 and a gradual
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 to nearly 100
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 over the next 20 years. Opposite, there
was
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 only about five
million
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tonnes
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 In 1974, It was
lowest
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 and the number of cargoes transported by pipeline underwent a growth to 20
million
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tonnes
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 In 1994.
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,
this
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 number remained until the end of the period. The figure for freight provided in the
UK
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 by water and rail each amounted
at
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to
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 40
million
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tonnes
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 In the first of the period. After 1978,
this
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 figure
of
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for
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 water witnessed a significant rise to nearly 60
million
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tonnes
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 and dropped
at
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 about 45
million
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tonnes
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 In 1998 and reached over 60
million
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tonnes
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 In 2002.
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, at the same time, the quality of
fright
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freight
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 sent in the
UK
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 by rail saw a fluctuation and backed
original
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the original
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 figure, at 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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