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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide data on
main
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the main
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 causes that
effected
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affected
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 people to migrate
in
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to
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 and from the UK in 2007. It is important to notice that there were given six reasons: formal
study
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, definite job, accompany/join, no reason stated,
lookinf
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looking
 for work, and other.
Overall
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, in both
charts
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charts,
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 the highest
percentage
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 dominated the reason
of
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for
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 definite job. Meanwhile, the rate at
wich
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which
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 people migrated
in
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to
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 the UK
due to
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 a formal
study
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 is significantly higher than of those who left because of that. On the one hand, in 2007, migration in and out
the
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 country
due to
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 reasons
such
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 as accompany/join, definite job, and other types attained approximately the same
percentage
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, between each other.
According to
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pie
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the pie
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 charts, more people moved
in
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to
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 the region to
study
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,
in contrast
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, the lowest
percentage
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 of residents emigrated to
study
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 abroad.
Furthermore
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, the
percentage
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 of
emigrants
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immigrants
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 looking for work was gradually higher than immigrants,
likewise
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 with those who
do
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did
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 not
stated
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state
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 a reason.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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