You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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A glance at the provided reveals the percentage of adult male smokers among seven countries (namely, Armenia, Egypt,
Lebanon
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, Bangladesh, Cuba, Mexico and Australia)
as well as
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the
world
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average in two time periods.
Overall
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, it is evident that, over the period, there was a decline in the number of
men
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male
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smokers in most countries;
however
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, greater numbers of men in Egypt and
Lebanon
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smoked in 2015.
While
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slightly over 40 per
cent
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of the
world
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's male citizens smoked, it is evident from the information provided that those who lived in Armenia, Bangladesh and Cuba were more likely to smoke than other nations. Armenia and Bangladesh had by far the highest percentage among all nations, with over 60 per
cent
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of their male citizens
smoked
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smoking
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. Third in terms of the smoking population, meanwhile, was Cuba. Approximately 53 per
cent
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of their male population smoked during the year in question. In stark contrast, the smoking rates in Egypt,
Lebanon
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, Mexico and Australia were below the
world
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's level. In 2015, the percentage of Egyptian and
Lebanon
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male smokers, surprisingly, had greatly increased by 15 per
cent
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and 10 per
cent
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respectively and exceeded the
world
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's medium. It is interesting to note that,
although
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there was a declining trend for other nations,
as well as
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the
world
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's ratio which dropped to 35 per
cent
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, most of their figures were, still, over the
world
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's one by 5 to 15 per
cent
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.
In contrast
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, Mexico and Australia's numbers were lower than the
world
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's figures.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lebanon, world, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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