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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
grams
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 per
person
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 per week who ate fish, chicken, lamb and
beef
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 in Europe between 1979 and 2004.
Overall
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, it can be seen that all kinds of meat were fluctuated.
Furthermore
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, the consumption of
beef
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, lamb and fish decreased over the 25-year period,
while
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 people who eat chicken in
grams
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 increased. On the one hand, the number of citizens who ate chicken per
person
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 in a week was around 140
grams
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 in 1979 and hit a peak at approximately 250
grams
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then
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 slightly fell to roughly 245
grams
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 for one
person
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 per week in 2004.
On the other hand
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, People who ate
beef
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 and lamp fluctuations began at merely 220 and 150
grams
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 in 1979;
moreover
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, the
beef
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 and lamp declined of the citizens of Europe that ate these two kinds of meat to about 100 and 50
grams
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, respectively, for 7 days in 2004.
In addition
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, the number of people who ate fish was stay still at around 50
grams
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 per
person
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, person, beef with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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