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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart below provides information on the percentage of
people
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 choosing to live in
cities
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 in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020 and its predictions for 2030 and 2040. In Malaysia and Indonesia, the number of
people
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 living in
cities
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 dramatically increased from 1970 to 2020 and is predicted to continue in 2040. Meanwhile, in the Philippines and Thailand, it moderately increased year by year but is estimated to rise in 2040. In 1970, around 30% and more than 10% of
people
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 in Malaysia and Indonesia preferred staying in
cities
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, respectively.
This
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 percentage rapidly climbed yearly until 2020; it was more than 70% and just above 60% in 2020, respectively.
As a result
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, it is predicted that the percentage of
people
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 staying in
cities
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 in Malaysia and Indonesia will reach 80% and 60% in 2040, respectively.
On the other hand
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, In the Philippines and Thailand, the growth of the number of
people
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 living in the towns was slightly slow. It changed from around 30% to 40% in the Philippines, anyhow it got to 50% in 1990.
Thus
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, it is estimated to get 50% in 2040. In Thailand, it slightly increased from just below 20% in the first year of the period to 30% in 1990, and
then
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 it remained relatively constant throughout the period.
However
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, it is predicted to jump to more than 40% in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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