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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The given
line
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 chart
illisturet that
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illustrates
 how
much
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many
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 goods
carried
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were carried
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by
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in
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million
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tonnes
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 in British from 1978 to 2002
according to
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 four different
type
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types
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 of transportation. Looking from an
overall
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perspectives
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perspective
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, It is readily
apperent
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apparent
 that the road
line
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 was not only in the beginning the highest but
also
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at the end
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 of the period almost 70 and 90
million
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tonnes
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 respectively. It is observed that the total qualitifes of goods transported by road
line
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 went up and down
untill
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until
in
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apply
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1990 and it was stable between 1990 and 1994
then
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 it
significiantly
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significantly
 increased to almost 90
million
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tonnes
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. It can be seen that
popularity
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the popularity
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 of
water
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the water
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 and rail
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line
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lines
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 was exactly
same
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the same
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 from 1975 to 1979
by
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with
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 40
million
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tonnes
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. After that
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the rail
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rail
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the rail
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line
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 followed by
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fluctuation
fluctuaciton
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fluctuation
 and it was stable after 1998.
However
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, unlike
rail
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the rail
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line
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, after 1974,
water
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the water
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line
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 changed slightly near to 10
million
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tonnes
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untill
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until
 1997 and rose to
higher
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more
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 than 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
Moreover
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, the pipeline was the lowest in the given period, even
it
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though it
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 increased significantly between 1975 and 1982.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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